原標(biāo)題:北京環(huán)球教育名師拆解分析雅思范文
在烤鴨們不斷低齡化的時(shí)代,一個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單的就業(yè)類話題,已然成為難點(diǎn)了。以雅思最近的寫(xiě)作考題來(lái)說(shuō),對(duì)于有求職或者工作經(jīng)驗(yàn)的考生來(lái)說(shuō)還是淺顯易懂的。
這年頭,聊到工作,我們談理想,說(shuō)未來(lái)。就是不提及工資,因?yàn)閭牡狞c(diǎn)就在工資上。在無(wú)數(shù)次地拉低本地區(qū)平均工資的同時(shí),這次又被寫(xiě)作題目痛打傷處。
環(huán)球教育(原環(huán)球雅思)楊亮老師在此拆解雅思范文為大家分析作文該怎么寫(xiě)。
原題如下:
It is a good thing that salaries of senior management positions are much higher than other work in the same company or organization.To what extent do you agree or disagree?20161029
這個(gè)題目其實(shí)直截了當(dāng),并沒(méi)有太多需要考生們注意分析的重點(diǎn)。提問(wèn)方式也是極其常見(jiàn)的方式,因此從論證的角度而言,本題難度有限。
In ordinary workers'mind,people in senior management positions are usually bookworms wearing glasses,sitting in front of a desk with a cup of coffee in a nice suit and doing nothing in the whole day,and besides they quarrel with each other in some meetings for some odd reasons.Thus,general employees can be easily shocked by knowing how much those eggheads can earn monthly.No matter whether they can accept this cruel truth or not,it is definitely reasonable.
開(kāi)頭段,在交代背景之后,直接點(diǎn)題。只不過(guò)本文的背景和點(diǎn)題都是從普通員工的角度出發(fā),這也符合題干的要求。本段最后一句,闡明了筆者的觀點(diǎn),人家賺得多還是有原因的。
On the one hand,those high-level managing talents do contribute much more to development of companies or organizations compared with common workers.As a rule,those managing staffs take part in decision-making process,including both formulating short-term plans and long-term strategies.It goes without saying that their intelligence does decide the future for their companies and organizations.On top of this,positions associated with management are fairly more demanding than general ones.In spite of their excellent education background,those people are also required to have extensive working experience,effective communication skills and outstanding leadership.By analogy,people with all above qualities surely need to be paid well enough.
本段為主段,全文是四段結(jié)構(gòu),但是為不平均分段。本段主要通過(guò)兩個(gè)分論點(diǎn)來(lái)論證高級(jí)管理職位的工資高是因?yàn)樗麄儗?duì)公司的貢獻(xiàn)大和這些職位的要求很高。
On the other hand,people with adverse views assert that relatively higher payment that managing staffs gain drives general workers feel unfair,which is consequently and obviously disadvantageous to their work.This is what human resource department is concerned about and what it needs to deal with.HR people are obliged to persuade all employees accept what they are paid by companies and provide an acceptable and promising career plan for each of them,letting them know all of them have a chance to get a high payment.
本段為次段,重點(diǎn)論述反方觀點(diǎn)。首先陳述反方觀點(diǎn),并且對(duì)此進(jìn)行反駁和提供解決的方案。通過(guò)此邏輯來(lái)否定反方觀點(diǎn)。
Jealousness often brings people unhappiness and even anger.Some people only focus on salary gap instead of realizing how different their resumes are.Employers are never stupid enough to pay high salary for an idler.
結(jié)尾段,并沒(méi)有保持筆者一如既往地樸實(shí)風(fēng)格。而是相對(duì)而言飄渺了一點(diǎn),但是并未脫離原題。
本文的分段方式和筆者之前文章的平均分段方式略有不同,歡迎各位斧正。
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